Do you remember? I do
A day in November
As the frost nipped our faces
Our words were lost in the evening air
And our breath made rippling shadows on the
ground at our feet
The air around us was cold and harsh
But I felt warm
Our feet crunched on the fresh snow on the ground
But I felt warm
Then the sun went over the mountains
And the light receded from view
We parted ways
And I felt cold
5 comments:
This poem is so creative. I like how it's sort of a love poem. Good job!
There are so many cool things about this poem, but my favorite are the four lines in the middle: the rhyming with "around" and "ground", combined with the repetition of "But I felt warm." What's your favorite thing about it?
Nice word play. And I really felt the physical experience of the emotion - warmth turning to cold. Nice poem.
This is an amazing poem! It felt like I was there. It like how you word it, it has a nice touch. I wounder how you got this idea? It is a really good poem!
That was nice
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