The eyes
Never blinking
Always staring
Searching but never finding
They see all
The sparkling eyes
The smile
The safety
They see all
The sadness in ones eyes
The sacrifice
The sorrowful
They see it all
From the shadows
Of their shallow skins
Speaking with one another
With soft voices
Should they strike
Should they stay
Or should they disappear in the night
For they can only stare
With their wondering eyes
The lost are lost
Ever to wonder
But never to be found
12 comments:
Wow! I love the words "shallow" and "shadow" together, as well as being followed by the "should"s. Just all the S's!!!!
I really like all the word choice in this poem. It leaves you wondering what the story is behind this poem. Good job!
I like how this takes the whole "you can see someone's soul through there eyes thing" to a whole new level. Also, I personally love the way the poem is structured, it looks like a detective duck.
In this poem it leaves you wondering. I also like the word choice of it.
The vocabulary in this peice is very descriptive and some readers can relate. The words flow and the structure is cool.
I really love the word choice! Especially when you used sorrowful😊
I really love the word choice! Especially when you used sorrowful😊
I really love the ending, "never to be found". It leaves you wondering about the story behind the poem. Good job!
I really love the word choices in this poem, such as the words shallow and shadow. It really just sounds good too me. Anyway I love it
This is really good! I love your word choice in this! There are really good describing words! Who's eyes are you talking about?
I love how you use so many S's. It makes a really good contrast.
Really nice poem, pulled me in right away. Made me think about how much our eyes can tell someone.
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