The forest was muted, like a lifeless ocean on a moist summers day. I lay there, looking up into the blue blank sky. Thinking about my leading day, thinking about the past of when the first day hit of the earth breaking. The world was shook so violently. The population died, including my entire family.
It was a normal summer's day. My dad and mom were off work. My brother and I were playing with the hose, splashing each other back and forth. While my mom in the kitchen, cleaning the dishes, watched my dad run after my wet dog, Spark, it hit. Just before my eyes.
A blur.
It seemed as though months passed before my eyes, but seconds skimmed the surface of my tears before I could process what had just happened... to the earth breaking.
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I remember… when we camped out in the living room and set up all of the collectible trains on Christmas Day and called road call every ti...
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May 4, 2017 I woke up this morning to my favorite type of day, dark, cold, and rainy. I got out of my bed with the help of music by My Ch...
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Alone, nothing to see, hear, smell Nothing to do All alone for there is nothing Only darkness with a flash of light in the distance
11 comments:
Wow. That was really swell. Why did everyone but you have to kick the bucket? Is there anyone still out there? Was it sort of like the fifth wave? Where there were affairs that came before it? That was really deplorable. You were totally having a good time, then BOOM!!! Ha-ha. Your entire family is dead! Wow Earth. Just wow!! You had to obliterate us all! Well. I don't blame you. We are total jerks to you. Sorry bout that Earth. Oh please don't kill us!
This was super descriptive for such a small story. I feel like I've just read an excerpt from a best-selling book signing. I hope you keep on writing.
This was such great story. Emotional, but great. I like your details and everything about it!
I love how you put the climax first, and then put all the events leading up to that point after. It was so interesting and I could picture it in my mind. Good job!
The thought of the entire population dying is one of the scariest things a man can think of. That's why zombie movies are so popular. When would the "Earth Breaking" take place?
Wowza! Good job my dude! 👏😂👍🏻
That story was great! Are you going to write more?
Wow! Nice job! Very descriptive! Will you do a part two?
Honestly, I have no idea what I just read. The line, "It seemed as though months passed before my eyes, but seconds skimmed the surface of my tears before I could process what had just happened... to the earth breaking." Really stood out. I loved the metaphone you used, of the seconds skimming your tears. (I think that was a metaphor)
This had great descriptions for a small story and will you do a part two?
Hey, that's pretty good. I like, hope you do more like this
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