A thousand feet standing. All look up. The sand soft and green swished around, then sealed, as did the orb silver and old. The feet turned and the light opened letting in the smudged image of man. The air stopped, as did the hum of voices. Nothing swayed. All was still. Then from the sand mountains far above the group, a round tip of a barrel poked out with two green eyes staring at the target like a man staring at his friend filled with guilt. The white boot stepped forward to the marked place. The finger pulled and the eyes closed as the shame sped up and found its mark on the heart of the man.
Ten years before........
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14 comments:
Hjgvcv what was the ten years before?! I wanna know! That was so awesome! The beginning reminds me of a short story that I read. Called "dark they were, and golden eyed"
This reminds me of a story we read on Monday. This is a good thing. Through Mars is a distant planet, millions of miles away, it is still one of the best places to set a short story. Mars always had that creepy factor for me. What inspired you to write this?
What was so cool that it literally gave me chills. Keep it up!
Woot woot! Cool you should make more, it's scary but cool!
Great job! I love how you described the scene so vividly.
Ooooohhhhh! My goodness I love it! Nice job!👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
This was very vivid I could see every detail with the way you described it.
That was cooler than a freezer. I liked that I could see every detail clearly. Good description
This was so great and really reeled me in. I want to know what happens! Also, I love how you said "as did the orb silver and gold", it sounds so neat with the subject before the adjectives.
I like your description. Really well written.
This was great
This was really great and had great descriptions
So descriptive
I love the amount of pictures. Very well written.
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