sugar
sweet
with
a treat
and also
yummy in
the end
but when you
open that
delicious treat
you will meet
and you will
see the
best
thing
you
have
EVER
had!
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11 comments:
I love the sounds of "treat", "eat", and "meet". I'm not sure if you meant to do that or not, but it's really awesome!
Short, simple and to the point. Good work.
Short but very descriptive, explains it very good.
This poem really flows and I like the layout.
I was laughing so hard thinking of the rap that went with this!
I love your layout. I love how you described how candy tastes, " sugar, sweet" amazing job!
The way you structured the poem makes it more fun to read. I also like the first two words starting with S.
I loved how you rimed! And that is pretty much a description of cand in a bottle.
I really like how you layed out the words. I feel the same way about candy! 🍭 It's delicious and you described it perfectly! Awesome job
I love this! I remember how we rapped it in class. But, anyhow, very well shaped!
Lovely in the words chosen as well as the way you arranged the words to form a picture. Now I have to ask myself.....do I want a candy?
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