the sun in our eyes
the wind in our hair
the waves crashing
the water splashing
the sun set
the day gone
Then came... the goodbye
the tears shed
the empty feeling
until next time
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11 comments:
This is great! I love the picture and the way you hooked me into your writing!
The picture said it all. I love how you broke up the poem.
I love the way you kind of like listed it. Not in a boring way but you went further into it.
I really like how the picture game the poem more meaning. I love the way that it is listed and how it all makes sense together!
I really love the setup of the poem, it is very cool. That is a beautiful image!
I really loved the emotion you conveyed in this story. It made me feel like I was there experiencing it for my self. All around this was a great poem.
I really like this style of poetry! I have only been to the beach 2 times. And that experience was amazing. You described it very well.
I really like how you included the good part and the sad part. How many times have you been to the beach?
I love how you added a picture. Although I could already picture these words in my head the picture really helped.
I think the picture goes beautifully with you peam. I think you did great starting every sentence with the. This is not always easy to do. This remind me of my trip to CAL. Love it.
Wonderful use of simple words and style to convey the emotions we've all felt. Love it!
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